I feel the weight of head on hands
The crowd’s roar’s running over
Images are standing on the stands
And I am judged tonight as rover.
No killing, violence or plunder
It’s just for road above, not under.
And wrathful voices in my head
Demand the payment for my debt.
They want no money for redemption
I have to start my self creation.
I see the earth beneath my feet
If only I would be, like it, replete
With all those shaking scorching stones!
And then, perhaps, I wouldn’t let my bones
Petrify, embracing all my flesh and mind,
Making that annoying sound of grind.
Guy Nickwell
fiztrainer
10/04/2012 at 1:26 pm
WOW … Very powerful. There’s a lot in there. I want read this over and over
Guy Nickwell
10/04/2012 at 2:04 pm
It’s only the first part.)
fiztrainer
10/04/2012 at 6:32 pm
I look forward to the next.
seonwellbeingacademy
10/04/2012 at 1:33 pm
Sometimes you just have to read over and over again to get the meaning and this one is just like that. Maybe, when you petrify your bones, you may find new flesh and mind of yours.
Guy Nickwell
10/04/2012 at 2:01 pm
You see it differently.
aabbcici
10/04/2012 at 1:34 pm
If only I would be,
Only if you would be.
orlando gustilo
10/04/2012 at 1:37 pm
I like the images here and the elusiveness.
himanshusahay23
10/04/2012 at 1:46 pm
Beautiful.
theunderdogfiles
10/04/2012 at 1:51 pm
Amazingggg
simply beautiful!
Guy Nickwell
10/04/2012 at 2:02 pm
Thanks a lot!
seetarn
10/04/2012 at 2:24 pm
Guy, its a very beautiful and thoughtful poetry there…good job…god bless you…take care..
deanjbaker
10/04/2012 at 2:46 pm
enjoyed this..
gacochran
10/04/2012 at 2:51 pm
Thanks for part 1. I feel that fine line between abyss and creation…and will live in the tension as I await part 2.
myrthryn
10/04/2012 at 4:05 pm
Very nice!
isha_bemyfriend
10/04/2012 at 5:08 pm
Simply great! The words made me read it again to feel it…
alittlekinky
10/04/2012 at 5:16 pm
I really liked this!
in-a-yacto
10/04/2012 at 5:19 pm
I love the way it’s like a story, very cleverly done. Love the fact that it’s two parts (or more) cause it really does get people anticipating…
Christine Keleny
10/04/2012 at 6:38 pm
Nice.
mandacat1
10/04/2012 at 10:15 pm
You seem a very deep person…and yet you seem to possess lightness…like in the rain poem. Interesting. I like your work. May your depths be light to you x
subtlekate
11/04/2012 at 1:41 am
This is very strong.
I HAVE A VOICE
11/04/2012 at 3:55 am
Profound and yet, the weight is almost one of awaiting glory. Thank you sincerely. Deborah
Pup Felicity
11/04/2012 at 6:52 am
I feel the POWER in your poem. Amazing.
Keep it up…and thanks for liking our post! appreciate it.
Love,
http://www.pupfelicity.com
Elisabeth
11/04/2012 at 10:21 am
Thanks for liking my post at folioreviews.wordpress.com. It brought me to your site – and your stuff is great! I am going to follow. Thanks!
thewondermya
11/04/2012 at 10:31 am
Beautiful
Kay Salady
11/04/2012 at 10:53 am
Redemption comes at such a cost. For some, it is free. I believe it’s dependent upon your perspective. You’ve written a very powerful piece.
Bodhi du Jour
11/04/2012 at 11:01 am
Thank you for “liking” my post. It brought me here and I simply cannot stop reading your posts. Simply wonderful! So, thank you again!
Minette
11/04/2012 at 11:02 am
words are powerful, i can hear the sound and emphasis as I read the lines! Good One! Keep it up! and thanks for liking my post http://tsaynatown.wordpress.com/2012/04/10/drink-review-vitamilk-choco-shake/
Love,
http://tsaynatown.wordpress.com/
Jeremy
11/04/2012 at 11:39 am
Guy:
This is really great stuff. This one reminds me of Rilke’s, Book of Hours. Its a book that I keep going back to, filled with redemption and the earth, just like this poem.
Jay The Baker
11/04/2012 at 12:27 pm
Very powerful poem. Looking forward to the next. Thank you for stopping by and liking the PCA blog post. Jay
Paws To Talk
11/04/2012 at 3:04 pm
Very deep and powerful!
Lace
11/04/2012 at 6:43 pm
I love it! Looking forward to the second part, or 3rd… =)
veehcirra
11/04/2012 at 9:57 pm
Gosh, your words create such a vivd picture…you play with words really well
thebaldwinpoet.wordpress.com
12/04/2012 at 3:08 am
Haunting and beautiful. Past lives haunting.
ari_gato
12/04/2012 at 4:57 am
this looks like it could lend itself to an intense kind of cycle. i fully assert that i’m happy to be on the audience end of this one, and i sorta think myself sadistic for admiting this.
Ameera
12/04/2012 at 6:39 am
Thank you for the liking my blog. Nice to meet you and you are really awesome!
John Higgins
12/04/2012 at 10:35 am
strong and profound words
Michael Wilcox
13/04/2012 at 3:55 pm
After I read this a couple of times, the first word out of my mouth was, WOW. And I noticed the first commenter on the list said WOW too–as if to affirm my response of WOW.
ernestwhile
13/04/2012 at 5:11 pm
Seems like it’s written by a seed… or a zombie!
Guy Nickwell
14/04/2012 at 8:05 pm
Neither of the two.
janetlandis
13/04/2012 at 5:28 pm
Incredibly beautiful and moving. Thank you so much for writing and sharing it.
patrickandersonjr
13/04/2012 at 8:13 pm
Powerful stuff, Guy. Looking forward to reading more.
paperdollsgetcut
13/04/2012 at 8:58 pm
Hi Nick,
I am still figuring out how to navigate on here. I commented on Sky Slides and you asked me a question. I replied to your question but have no idea how to tell if you got my reply or if it went through. Please let me know.
After I sent the reply, I read on your blog about our senses being truthful when our heads can get in the way and it validated in a big way what I had said. Please let me know if you got that reply/comment, as I’m truly interested in your take on it.
Thanks, Kristina
littlemissobsessivesanatomy
15/04/2012 at 12:32 pm
Hi Jess..i have just nominated you for the Sunshine Award..
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littlemissobsessivesanatomy
15/04/2012 at 12:33 pm
Hi Nick..i have just nominated you for the Sunshine Award..
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sseuja
16/04/2012 at 1:06 am
Wow, that poem is thought-provoking and very memorable.The imagery is alluring and deep yet light, and I like your word choice a lot. The poem seems to reflect your user image and fits so nicely. I admire you greatly in this art that I am unskilled (and somewhat unfamiliar) in. Maybe I’ll start reading a few more poems now.
Also, thanks for visiting my blog and liking a post.
☽✵ℳ00ℕṦℌ1И3✵☾
18/04/2012 at 1:47 am
Hey Guy! I’ve nominated you blog for an award. I know you are deserving of the nomination! Just follow the rules provided at the link below. Best of luck to you my friend! http://m00nsh1n3.wordpress.com/2012/04/17/liebster-blog-award-nomination/
ns
19/04/2012 at 8:43 pm
Lovely!
Coach Sue
19/04/2012 at 9:59 pm
Very thought-provoking. Thanks for placing some new thoughts in my head
Sue Bock
http://couragetoadventurecoaching.wordpress.com
jbh
21/04/2012 at 1:27 pm
like the whole setup– words, pictures, theme– time to grab a cup of coffee and have a bit of a read–
Evelyn
26/04/2012 at 3:23 pm
Excellenet poem!
“And wrathful voices in my head
Demand the payment for my debt.”
those are amazing lines, wish I thought of them. the rhythm is perfect…
If I were to offer constructive criticism,
the flow of the following lines seems off.
“With all those shaking scorching stones!
And then, perhaps, I wouldn’t let my bones”
maybe instead
“With all those shaking scorching stones!
then perhaps protect my bones”
or something…just seems like that second line has too many beats to it.
Anyway, great poem, very strong, tight.
Sushma Webber
28/04/2012 at 12:13 am
Hi Guy, Thanks for your feedback on my blog. Your blog is absolutely amazing.
Louisa Thomsen Brits
28/04/2012 at 9:16 am
I felt the, ‘shaking scorching stones’. Thank you for bravery and beauty. And the pleasure you take in the beauty others reveal. L
Jo Fredric
30/04/2012 at 7:09 am
Thanks for the like on our blog post. You have some great poems here. All the best with your writing.
msuzanne
01/05/2012 at 7:48 pm
Terrific, very engaging.
himanshusahay23
02/05/2012 at 8:08 pm
I have nominated you for the Liebster Award! Check it out here: http://bulletinamaelstrom.wordpress.com/2012/05/02/the-liebster-award-my-first/
dysfunctional unit
03/05/2012 at 12:41 am
f-in rocks very good like the rhythm-hard sharp sounds utilized through word choice-rhymes in no way seem contrite or forced. excellent look forward to reading more
Scrapbook Stories
04/05/2012 at 5:18 am
Hi Guy~
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kindredspirit23
13/05/2012 at 4:02 am
You have been nominated for the Versatile Blogger Award!
Please visit my site tomorrow evening for details.
Scott
Russel Ray Photos
17/05/2012 at 2:21 am
Hope all is well since this seems to be your most recent post.
P. Graham
17/05/2012 at 3:38 pm
WOW. I wish I had another word(s) for powerful. Wait, I think I got it… core shaking. This is amazing!
"NowWhat?"
22/05/2012 at 8:01 pm
You make many loud, strong statements, as if your throwing pasta up against the wall to see which one sticks. “NOW WHAT?”
Rosanne Moulding
23/05/2012 at 6:14 pm
Really powerful poem, nice work!
thesubterraneanworld
26/05/2012 at 11:32 am
Beautifully Miraculous!
Happy Writing.
-Naima.
MarinaSofia
29/05/2012 at 7:55 am
I miss you, it’s been a while since you posted anything. So I’ve allowed myself a gentle nudge to encourage you to share your writing with us again and nominated you for an Inspiring Blog Award. Hope you don’t see this as an additional burden, but as what it is: admiration.
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From The Pews
29/05/2012 at 3:31 pm
Painful…
How does redemptions occur??
Angie D
02/06/2012 at 8:04 pm
You write beautifully! Such vivid and raw imagery to take in. I really appreciate how equally creative and thought-provoking your work is. It’s not just a flutter of images it’s a complex essay in word pictures.
Jason E. Marshall
05/06/2012 at 7:53 pm
I found this powerful and moving! Nice work!
livingingratitude
09/06/2012 at 7:16 pm
Thanks for your support, Guy, and thanks for your sweet poetry. Nominated you today for The Versatile Blogger award. Congratulations! See post at: http://stateofgrateful.wordpress.com. 3 “rules”: link to blog that gave it; list 7 things about yourself; link to 15 other blogs you like. Thanks again for your great work, Kathleen
boomiebol
12/06/2012 at 6:30 pm
Hello
I have nominated you for the Thank you for writing Award. Please visit my blog- http://www.boomiebol.wordpress.com on the award details.
Have a good evening and thanks always for the support
Boomie Bol
poethical
27/06/2012 at 9:15 am
Gorgeous, cool, deep, realistic… Really like it!!
olbigjim
23/08/2012 at 9:01 am
Good afternoon. I’ve nominated you for the Beautiful Blogger Award. I always enjoy visiting your blog and come away from it a much better person for having visited. Please visit my blog, http://jimlwright.wordpress.com/2012/08/23/the-beautiful-blogger-award/, to see my post about the Beautiful Blogger Award.
Donnell Jeansonne
12/10/2012 at 6:09 am
I enjoy your poetry and would like to extend a Liebster Award to you.
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